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Post by Fernstorm on Oct 6, 2007 7:16:13 GMT -5
Cat's Name: Beechbelly Gender: Tom Age: 57 moons Rank: senior warrior Clan: DarknessClan Personality: A generous and kindhearted tom. He is trustworthy and he can be short-tempered when he is annoyed and can be rather harsh when angry. Appearance: Beechbelly is a white tom with tan forelegs and brown face , ears, legs, and a brown bushy tail.He has a white chest and belly and he has yellow eyes which turn golden in the sun. He is a muscular tom but can run up to high speeds. Beechbelly has a long scar across his face from when driving out a badger. His left hindleg looks like it's twisted but it's a normal leg. Picture: History: Beechbelly was brought to the clan when he was a kit and he had the smell of rogues. He didn't know anyhting except for the sweet milk scent of his mother. He was an enthustiatic apprentice and he listened to his mentor, Wildflower. He was made a warrior soon after for his great courage. Beechbelly is a loyal warrior and he proved it many times. He has chased out a badger a couple of times, he fought in many battles , and he has helped all around camp. His apprentice was Stoneheart (Silverclaw) and he believed her story.Now he is a senior warrior and will never abondon his clan. Example of Roleplay: none Other: none
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Post by Crystal.Light on Oct 6, 2007 7:59:45 GMT -5
I'm not sure about this one. I'll leave it for Goldenheart to decide.
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Post by ♥Goldenheart♥ on Oct 6, 2007 9:09:32 GMT -5
I think the history needs a little bit of work still (what did he do all day in the time between being a new warrior and being a senior warrior?) and he's a little young for a senior warrior. The appearance you have is the bare minimum, and I'd like it if you expanded on it a little. Does he have any scars? Maybe there's something exceptional about his left hindpaw? Is he more muscular than slender, or the other way around? There's plenty more you can say.
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Post by Fernstorm on Oct 7, 2007 4:44:35 GMT -5
I fixed it!
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Post by ♥Goldenheart♥ on Oct 7, 2007 7:31:51 GMT -5
There, that's much better!
Accepted.
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