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Post by dewflower on Jul 28, 2007 3:13:00 GMT -5
Cat's Name: Dewkit Gender: She-cat Age:5 and a half moons Rank:kit, for now Clan:Windclan Personality:Spunky and hyper but wants to be a warrior so bad that she becomes quiet when near a warrior. As a kitten earlier on she was the best play fighter. Appearance: A beautiful tabby cat with unknown roots. History:Was born to a mother who died giving birth. Grew up with other kits and is unusually calm and serious when her mother is brought up. Example of Roleplay:Dewkit ran full speed towards the warrior den. She had heard that it was empty and she wanted to check it out. Just as she was about to go in, a warrior stepped out and looked at her. She gave a sweet smile, and scampered back to the nursery. Other: very good at fighting and fast
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Post by ♥Goldenheart♥ on Jul 28, 2007 9:55:07 GMT -5
It's okay, but you really need to use your words in the Appearance section. Also, it might be helpful to write out the history, just in case someone wants to check what it is and isn't interested in reading two bios when they only wanted one. (It does happen, especially when I'm compiling my periodic Allegiances list!) Try editing it just a little. Also, your grammar needs a little touching up here and there. (Where you put "Barkkits," it should say "Bark-kit's".)
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Post by ♥Goldenheart♥ on Jul 28, 2007 12:56:40 GMT -5
There, that's better.
Accepted.
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